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Today, it was another inch of snow on the rooftop.

Today, 517 inches. Each day another inch
of snow. Each day more
weight on every inch
of the roof
of the house.

Each day it was more
blinding, blank, and drifting snow
encasing the warmth
and the light
and the color
of the house,
until all that was left to see
from the outside was white.

Today, the roof collapsed.
I missed you.
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chadwood Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   Writer
Very very powerful. The last line carries momentum by the weight of the snows. Brilliant work.
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pretty-yin Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you very much, as always, Chad. :)
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Buried and gone in the cold, eh?
I love the way you ended this. Sort of a steady build up to a very flat and inarguable ending...well done.
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pretty-yin Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure! (:
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