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(Contains: sexual themes and ideologically sensitive material)
i. Mary
wits, my brain has left me and i cannot
wrap my lips around the words
to ask if he’s asking what i think-
if i could think
that he is asking,
or if he’s telling what i think
if i could
that he is telling.
and i am split down the center
as the fog parts to make way for the rain.
hail.
and now nightfall
and no one can see because there
is no light.


ii. Centurion
Bold Judas marches forth and kisses
the girl on the cheek.
We guards descend, picking her up
and taking her away: this is the one.
This is the one who dares
challenge Caesar.


iii. Mary
in the morning she finds cloudy skies
painted on thighs, and wetness.

flood after thaw.


iv. Centurion
We took her
in and when she woke, she cried.
We took her in.
And she cried. We took it
upon ourselves to help her
understand the error of her
ways.

If she had not flaunted
it before us, we would have
never taken it.
She should have never challenged
Caesar.


v. Chorus
The morning the girl woke, she returned home
with videos and pictures of Judas
in every hand of every passerby:
evidence, but not only evidence
publicity.

And it got buried, so she dug it out.
And it got swept away, so she anchored it.

The media began to sing and some sang
that she was the hunter and others said
she was the prey.


vii. Centurion
Magdalene wants to pretend she's not a whore,
but we have video evidence.
We didn't have to choose her, she asked
us to choose her.
She challenged Caesar.

We had our pick of the litter
and we chose the one that bites.


viii. Mary
your honor, i could have sailed and sipped
of any sea, and they would have found me.
they are waves of the same water
and
I am a boat to be devoured.
all women are devoured with me
we all float in the same sea.


ix. Chorus

The Gods took Judas and the Guards
but they did not take Caesar.
Reflections on rape culture.

Huge thanks to :iconbeccalicious: for the feature! Also, as many of you pointed out, there was a minor typo. Thank you for bringing it to my attention, it's been fixed! I will try to thank everyone for their comments and favorites. Have a great day everyone, and thank you for your comments, discussion, and support!
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Given 2013-07-26
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Tefling Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Inspirational poetry, now I have to go and paint! Thanks for the emotive imagery.
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
:heart: Congrats on the DD! :clap:
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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willypie123 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
I actually had trouble reading this.
Good job on your writing.
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CalculatorBomb Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow...this would make a sad song...
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Rayckro Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
Congratulation on the Daily Deviation! :D
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wolfsong97 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Great way to explain rape here. Especially in the line "If she had not flaunted it before us, we would not have taken it." These lyrics are genius.
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ShonaliKapoor Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconcongratsddplz:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013   Writer

:+fav:

A very challenging piece--not to read, but the content works so well to a powerful conclusion--the challenge is past, but still here.

I enjoyed every word of this and congratulate you on the DD!

(There's one typo if you want to fix it: "We had our pick of the lit[t]er...." The second 't' is missing, imo.)

 

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charleswallace12 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
congrats on the dd. cool! :D
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AncalimeAndune Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
Very glad you received that DD. This is such a powerful piece, coming from an extremely unusual person. It was good to know why you switched back and forth between the capital and lower case i, as well. Very well done.
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EmmyIsAZebra Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This makes me think, was there ever a time where there wasn't a rape culture? 

This is an amazing poem, congrats on the DD! :huggle:
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chancerox Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
absolutely stunning. i will have to read this again sometime. 
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Hiland-Rose Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Professional Artisan Crafter
Interesting...the choice of using Mary Magdalene as your model... sad too because she was converted from her life as a harlot and became one of the first Saints, my particular favorite as I have taken her patronage with my Confirmation name... An interesting stringing of past and present none the less.... unfortunately rape is a power trip and those who wish to dominate and destroy will use it to accomplish their goals. This is an interesting piece, thanks for sharing it.
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pyrrhite Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
(You meant 'litter' not 'liter' ?) Very powerful, disturbing 
and masterfully written piece, congratulations.
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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chadwood Featured By Owner May 20, 2013   Writer
I found this write to be profoundly striking and even disturbing. That is to say, it was very affective.
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pretty-yin Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Student Writer
Excellent, that's what I was going for. Thanks, Chad. It's always a treat to see you in my inbox.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is incredible, Archer, absolutely incredible.
The capitalization seems to be a tad inconsistent, but otherwise, this is just one of the best things I've read lately. :heart:
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pretty-yin Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Student Writer
I did the capitalization thing very intentionally. Mary, as a speaker, capitalizes "I" only once (as she is in some way empowered) and then she speaks in passive voice. The other two speakers are intended to have a more commanding sense of self.

Thanks for the love, Fuzz :D
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I actually thought that might have been for reason. I initially messed with the lowercase i in my stuff to show a less secure voice in some poems. I think it's a good method. (Now I just do it cause I'm a shameful lazy bum. Hahaha..)

A pleasure, my dear. It's good to see you posting more regularly. :D
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pretty-yin Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Writer
:D are there any others that stick out to you as "...wait, why's that capitalized?" I'd like to think I caught it all, but you know when you're a writer you see it the way it's supposed to be, not the way it is XD

It's good to be posting more. Now I just need to get involved in the community again and reading again. :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
viii. Mary -- that was the only one that threw me off, but I'm having a duh moment now thinking about the significance of your explanation and I like it. So, no, I didn't see anywhere else that would throw a reader.

Also:

This is the one who dare
challenge Caesar.


I'd adjust to:
dares challenge

The community will be here when you get the time. (:
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pretty-yin Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much. I'll change that!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:salute::heart:
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pretty-yin Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Student Writer
is very intentional* Although you can't tell it by my comment grammar, apparently!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:B I'm guilty of bad comment grammar myself. lol
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