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Maiden.

The space between us is slant rhyme,
Burning-in, saturation, and exposure time,
Ink curves he drew from a lead line,
The way his fingers fit in yours,
Instead of mine.


Mother.

You are difficult to hone, granite.
I am prone to severing.
You are a vestige made of stone
That I could never be.


Crone.

Are you what is happening to me?
Rain and gravity have
Weathered the weaker parts
They leave you standing
Strong, a pyramid, a mountain.
I am haunted: a cliff, daunted
By the sea.
"Burning in" is a dark room technique to darken a portion of the picture through exposure to light

That's... all folks?

EDIT

I am shaking. Thank you so much, everyone, for your support. I greatly appreciate your comments, favorites, and any critiques you might have.

I am so thankful for :icongaioumonbatou: for featuring me and :iconbatousaijin: for suggesting me.
I am extraordinarily grateful for Batousaijin's constant support! He has been a incredibly amazing influence on my experience with DA.
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Given 2010-10-26
While the suggester linked me to a different work by ~pretty-yin, I felt that Envy was a strong example of the artist's voice, striking and poignant. ( Suggested by batousaijin and Featured by GaioumonBatou )
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2010  Student Writer
The space between us is slant rhyme - that's such a great opening :D I love it.
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010  Student Writer
Thanks. That is the base line for the rest of the work- I had to get those words out of my head, or they would have driven me mad!
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ashewalton Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Absolutely beautiful. The Wiccan theme is embedded subtly enough that a non-practising individual can draw their themes, but overtly enough that a practising witch can ply it out. Wonderful work, blessed be :wizardhat:
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you for your kind words!
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:iconashewalton:
ashewalton Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
You're certainly welcome! Keep on creating!
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guitargrl933 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
absolutely beautiful.
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you very much :)
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guitargrl933 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2010
of course!
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AStrangeAffair Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
This is absolutely fantastic. I especially love the bit about the mother. I feel like that about my own mother, though I could never have worded it as well as you have.
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you :)

I think that a lot of us feel that way about one or both of our parents. I also believe it's especially true for artists, like us.
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LeadHeart787 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Fantastic. This may mean much more than I think; the way this is written is beyond my grasp. Congratulations :)
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you.
And, the beauty of art is that it means what you interpret it as. There is no less or more. If it has touched you, I have done my job. :)
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LeadHeart787 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
You have succeeded...again, keep up the good work :)
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you so much :)
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LeadHeart787 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem. :)
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DarthInofficium Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
Good poetry does not get enough credit.
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
That is often true, unfortunately. Thank you for your support :)
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CerberusPhoenix Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
Very nicely done :aww:
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you very much.
And ...dammit I lost D:
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CerberusPhoenix Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
:XD: You're welcome
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Fran-artist Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
Beautifully written the "crone" part suggests something completely diffrent then the rest of the poem I was like what? Hahaha fantastic job, congratz
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pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you :)
Each portion of the poem is written in relation to a different person, so the connections between them aren't as concrete as other segmented poems. That's why the suggestion is different :D
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Minty-Illusion Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Beautifully written. Nice job!
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you very much
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paganfreya Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
)O( blessed be :)
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
Merry meet :)
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paganfreya Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
( i really need a like button on DA lol)
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
It would be useful!
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EmmaSloane Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
This is resonant on such a variety of levels. Congratulations on the DD!

All the best,

Emma
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you so much, Emma!
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purcell232 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Excellent poem, well declamed, well thought out.
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
Greatly appreciated :)
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CrimsonThrenody Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
Congratulations on your DD!

Beautiful piece. I love the separation and imagery associated with each. Well done.
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you!
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pheephee29Morgan Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010   Traditional Artist
cant see anything
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
oh no! I'm not sure how to fix that, I'm sorry :(
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WCSallySally Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
:)
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
:D!!
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WCSallySally Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2010
~*~ :thanks:
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batousaijin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
congrats! :clap:
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pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
THANK YOU SO MUCH. :glomp:
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batousaijin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
haha, not the one i recommended, but takes all kinds i guess! :shrug:
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:iconpretty-yin:
pretty-yin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010  Student Writer
just noted you about that, actually XD!
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